venus in montrose

She had gone on hiatus from her terminal felicity,

The languid lassitude having progressed from ennui to irritant

(As one second-tier deity in the pantheon bitterly noted

Immortality is just another word for fucking monotonous)

Coming to this plane sans the flourish and fol-de-rol

Normally accompanying earthly descents,

Having arrayed herself in such raiments

As seemed apropos in such a place,

Tresses tucked away under a stained Farmall cap,

Figure somewhat obscured by a hoodie and camo pants

(Yet drawing more than her share of too-long glances,

Their progenitors sensing something they hadnā€™t apprehended before,

The provenance of what stood before them

But dimly understood yet clearly a thing apart)

And she spent an indeterminate time in that scruffy burg,

Its one-block main drag footed by the schoolmarm-staid courthouse,

The gas wells and second-tier chain-store concerns,

Chance encounters with doe and bobcat on the few side streets,

Returning to her eternal domicile as inauspiciously as she had came,

And if one of her compatriots deigned to show interest

In respect to her time among her lessers

(The inhabitants of the terra firma

Generally regarded with a dollop of noblesse oblige

And a considerable helping of scornful disinterest)

She would become somewhat taciturn, hesitant

Characteristics almost unknown in this locale

And she would speak, almost in wonder,

Of how those she had sauntered among,

Saddled with their inherent imperfection,

The constraints yoked upon who they were

And the realm they inhabited

(Even the landscape, glaciers gifting them

A higgledy-piggledy of lakes, the dumpling-esque hills

Over-dramatically christened the Endless Mountains

Short on true grandeur or majesty)

Yet still cognizant, still struggling to attain

An ideal of beauty which they could never be privy to,

And for some time afterward it was not uncommon

To see upon her unspeakably striking visage

A faraway look bordering on discontent.

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10 thoughts on “venus in montrose

  1. This is brilliant! The ending says it all. Better life both good and bad, than a monotonous immortality.

    1. I would not argue the point in re immortality at all, though I guess I’ll have to take it on faith.

  2. mhall46184@aol.com April 12, 2024 — 3:57 pm

    But why is Venus slumming among us?

    1. It’s tough to find soft-serve ice cream with jimmies on Olympus.

  3. I put Venus into the search engine and up came some Sports Illustrated Swimsuit Issue type of girls. A nice surprise. But on a more serious note, I’ve often wondered if this whole immortality thing is one long drunken bing that never ends. We drink beer, converse, get crazy, sleep, and then do it all over again with hamburgers and other great food mixed in and we never die, but as you mentioned, that would probably get monotonous which is why I guess they make different kinds of beer. But the lady featured in this poem seems to be pining or striving for something and I like that. One other thing I love about this poem is that I can read it backwards, from the last line to the first and have fun doing it. I feel like Jimmy Piersall!

    1. mhall46184@aol.com April 12, 2024 — 4:26 pm

      Most interesting!

    2. If you go to baseball-reference and read Piersall’s stat line backwards you get Davey Martinez.

      1. It’s amazing and refreshing that Davey is still the manager the Nationals. I guess winning the WS extends the leash. Same for Bud Black in Colorado minus the WS.

        1. If you can get inside the thinking of Rockies management, you are a better man than I.

          1. mhall46184@aol.com April 16, 2024 — 11:56 am

            How many baskets did they sink last year? Or is that touchdowns?

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